tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11318523.post116180517913328321..comments2023-09-07T07:12:51.816-04:00Comments on Song of Myself: step up efforts to control the killingMatthew D Dunnhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03632800892744296973noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11318523.post-1161914914048221562006-10-26T22:08:00.000-04:002006-10-26T22:08:00.000-04:00It was supposed to be herky jerky dude.It was supposed to be herky jerky dude.Matthew D Dunnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03632800892744296973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11318523.post-1161819151164572652006-10-25T19:32:00.000-04:002006-10-25T19:32:00.000-04:00I like your poetic experimentation, but your narra...I like your poetic experimentation, but your narrative writing is too good to abandon for this long. This poem has a cool theme, but the punctuation and a couple of word selections make it a little herky jerky. Give us a story about anything. The crowd will respond.Pellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10289356657518957492noreply@blogger.com